This is my first pass through this score, first introduced in Substack Notes.
The Score
Write the same sentence three times.
Each time, change only one word — the one that feels most alive.
Map the emotional shift between versions with a single line or mark.
My First Try
The Thought That Returns
The Thought That Screams
The Thought That Cleave
The Thought That Loves Me
First Line
A line shifting through return, rupture, fracture, and a small inward tenderness.
My Second Try
The Thought That Returns
The Thought That Screams (Return)
The Part of me that Screams (Thought)
The Part of us that Screams (me)
Second Line
A line widening from thought, to reaction, to self, to something shared.
I’m sharing the lines as movement rather than still marks — a way to see how the emotional weight shifts when the words do.
A short reflection will follow next.
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